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our assignment was to paint a word picture in the readers mind how did i do?

THE roller coaster was standing there before me. I had gone on it earlier and almost hurled. I was going to ride the the big wooden beast again. Shivering Timbers. I could hear the screams of those on the car. It growled like a lion as the car rolled by. Its little brother the wolverine wild cat was near by. I had gone on it and it was lame. Anyway I was next in line I hopped on the car and off we went. I was sitting in the car waiting to get to the top. The suspense was killing me. Finally the car plumited strait down like a hawk swoping down on its prey. I was rushing around the track.The wind was rushing by me like those dryers at the car wash.We went up and down and up and down. Fianally the car came to a sudden stop like a speeding car at a stop light. I got out and it felt good to go on it one last time. Jacob Fredricks