Posted by nlubbers22 | Posted in Writing | Posted on October 1, 2013
Realistic Fiction-lead
Vroom! Noah was speeding around on the knee board at his cottage. His friend Johnny was there too! He was excited to be there. But he was scared to knee board.
Nick,
I like how you started with an onamonopia! It is a great attention-getter. 🙂
I’m excited to hear more about kneeboarding, and to see if Johnny tries to kneeboard or not.
Check the spelling of knee board…I think it is a compound word: kneeboard.
Keep up the great work!
Mr. Commeret
Oops! onamonopia is spelled: onomatopoeia 🙂